Writing review

In class we have been looking at the ways detectors write and tell a story and the way they present them.The ways they present the movie or story is by using actions, environment , costumes and the appearance of the character.Last week for writing we wrote a peace of writing or a script, I worked with Azania and Bluebell. For our work this week we had to partner up and highlight the sections of each others work into the category we thought the peaces fitted the most. I found that I have to work on adding more appearance into my work so you can tell what my character looks like. 

Our main character is Cassie.

Environment - green

Actions - red

Appearance - yellow

Words - blue

INT. 1992 - A psych ward in New York, ‘Cop’ is leaning against the wall next to ‘Ward Owner’ the setting is dim and dark, - late afternoon

Cop is wearing the typical cop uniform, the camera is looking up at him, he is frowning.

Ward owner is wearing a long silk robe, she has her hair down and it's dead straight. The camera is looking down at her, she is straight faced. 

Cop (Skeptical)

“Is it safe? Is she properly contained in there?”

‘Cop’ gestures to the door

Ward Owner (Smirking)

“Fully held back and defenceless.”

‘Cop’ smiles

‘Cop’ stands up from the wall and gently pushes against the solitary confinement room

Camera focuses on ‘Cassie’ she is hunched over in a corner with her hands behind her back, crying.

Cassie is wearing a white long gown, her hair is in rough plaits, the camera looks directly at her.

Cassie (Sniffling)

“Please don’t shoot me…”

‘Ward Owner’ laughs.

Cop (Cunning)

“What is your name?”

Cassie gets legitimately confused

‘Cassie’ (Confused)

“Why would you need my name sir? Surely you have police files’’

‘Cop’ is confused, wondering how she can stay so calm and witty during this time, she has been in a psych ward, a place for crazy people, for over 6 months.

Ward owner (Pissed)

“Bloody hell, cut the crap and answer the question”

‘Cassie’ stands up

Cassie

“My name.”

Cassie takes a deep breath and observes her surroundings, but she is sure of what she wants to do. 

Cassie

“Is Cassie Evans Green. And I would like you to leave.”

‘Cassie’ draws a knife from her back pocket and throws it with incredible force and the cops hat, aimed perfectly.

The knife pierces ‘Cop’s hat and gets pinned against the wall

‘Ward owner’ flinches.

‘Cop’ is stunned but won’t say it. He tries to remain calm.

Cassie stands defiantly, she wants to grin at them but decides against it, so she stands expressionless, but stands strong. 

Cop

“Clearly not so defenceless.”

Ward Owner

“I have no idea how she got that-”

‘Cop’ looks over at his hat pinned on the wall

‘Cop’ pulls out handcuffs and walks towards her.

Cop

“Okay, listen here, you are going to answer some questions, answer any of them wrong and these handcuffs will wriggle their way around your wrists. Got it?”

‘Cassie’ nods

Cop

“How long have you been here?”

  

Cassie (Numb)

“6 months”

‘Cop’ nods

Cop

“How are you acquainted with Miles Hargreen?”

Cassie

“He came in a few times and talked with me, taught me, told me I special. Don't really remember him much.” 

‘Ward Owner’ nods at ‘Cop’

Cop (Continuing)

“And, did you know that he… Passed away?”

Cassie (Getting number)

“Yes. I was informed 3 days ago about his passing. I heard from a friend… and before you ask that friend is one of the friends I have here.”

Cop

“Do you know why I am here?”

Cassie starts to piece everything together. 

Cassie 

“You are convicting me of the murder of Miles Hargreen.”

‘Cop’ simply nods.

Cassie holds out her arms, she has an idea to trick them. 

Cassie 

“Put them on then.”

Cop (Stunned)

“So you did it? You murdered him?”

‘Cassie’ lowers arms. Triumphant that her plan has worked its magic

Cassie (Pleased)

“There you go officer, you are not sure I did the crime. So please if you are not 100% sure then leave, and come back another time if you discover that it was me.”

‘Ward owner’ charges at her, enraged that his least favourite patient is not leaving the place he calls home. She is disturbing her peace.

Ward Owner (Mad)

“It is not your call to decide matters like these!”

Cassie (Challenging)

“Why, because I am crazy, or because I am a woman-”

‘Cop’ is fuming.

Cop (cuts her off)

“Cassie Evans Green you are under arrest for the murder of Miles Hargreen, anything you can can and will-

Cassie (interrupting)

“Be used against you.”

‘Cassie’ snaps the straps of the handcuffs using her knee and springs for the window.  

She lands. Breathing heavily as she pulls a smoke tube from her other pocket. She takes this time to thank her friend for smuggling in these supplies. 

‘Cassie’ lights a smoke tube.

Smoke fills the room

‘Cop’ draws his gun and starts firing and a silhouette drops to the floor

‘Cop’ believes it was Cassie he shot and leaves the room. Forgetting ‘ward owner’ 

Pan down to the floor to see ‘ward owner’ dead on the floor.

Pan up slowly to see ‘Cassie’ standing on the windowsill, smoke tube in hand biting her lip. 

‘Cassie jumps down from the window and the camera follows her as she runs.